March 20, 2010

Moving Day

Moving Day

Two sons
Many moves
Zip code changes
Sofas heavy
Stairs maneuvered
Particleboard dressers
Pickup trucks borrowed
Rented moving vans
Stiffened backs
Blistered hands
Friends invisible
Twine and bungee
Bed frames
Unbolt
Bolt
Shelf paper change
Excitement high
New sights
Sounds
Smells
Masking tape rolls
Boxes
Sizes many
Dishes
Pictures
Each move
Diminished smiles

J.R.G.4.25.2009

Submitted to : The Poetry Pantry #88

6 comments:

  1. Sharp breathlessness in these lines highlighting the tensions of moving day! Beautiful!

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  2. I can feel the burden of that moving and boxing stuff...Nice one ~

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  3. Felt every line. Especially Friends invisible.

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  4. Done it too many times ... luckily not in the last 29 years. However I could still feel the sense of burden that comes with each move. Well done.

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  5. Oh yes, I remember the "invisible friends" when Moving is Happening.......luckily these lads have a great dad!!!!

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  6. Each move diminished smiles... until that last line, I did not know where you were going. Really well written, nicely paced, evocative of emotion and situational place.

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