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| Art work by Kim Nelson |
Barn
By John R. Greenwood
Barn of weathered roughness
strong red boards taught and dry
physical brute unscathed by time
decades piled high as hay
his feet soaked with tractor smells
work ethic stance proud amongst men
landlocked ark for calf and hen
Love the sensory details you have included here, John. I can see the barn through your words.
ReplyDeletemmmm I have known barns exactly like this, full of personality and work ethic. I can smell it!
ReplyDeleteJohn -- I picked up the tone of the barn's stalwart being. Very strong metaphors. Wonderful! -- barbara
ReplyDeleteBarns have personalities... oh, yes they do. landlocked ark, loyal sentinel... SIGH. Very nice.
ReplyDeleteThere is something incredibly poetic for me in the sight of an old red barn standing in a field. You have captured the history of such a structure so well in your lines.
ReplyDeleteThank you for participating on Real Toads.
I like how you gave the barn life.
ReplyDeleteLandlocked ark like that thought,
ReplyDeleteYou took me right into that barnyard with your succinct yet detailed poem. Well written, John.
ReplyDeleteThis is gorgeous! Really unique imagery.
ReplyDeleteWhat a visual you created with your words. Fantastic!
ReplyDeleteYou have transported me back to childhood .. my grandparent's farm, summers spent traipsing in and out of their red (yes) barn!
ReplyDeleteClassic descriptive poetry, with a little hidden narrative, perhaps--like it very much, as I always struggle with the shorter stuff and admire hugely those who can execute it this well--this is lucid, intelligent, with a rose-tinge of heart, like the drawing on the barn boards. (I also appreciated your blog name and its backstory--can def relate to that chilled lizard state.)
ReplyDeleteNothing like an old red barn, my friend. "landlocked ark for calf and hen". Love it!
ReplyDeleteit is good to capture a moment with these rare remnants
ReplyDeleteVivid interpretation of this piece!! Nicely done.
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